mandag den 24. januar 2011

Poem # 6

Poet’s workshop

It’s the best when I’m being me

When I’m home alone and I hear weird noises
It’s the worst
When I fail in something I’m good at
It’s the worst
When I loose, either a game or in life
It’s the worst
When I’m mad at my self or others
It’s the worst

When I’m watching other people suffer
It’s the worst
Being in hospitals
It’s the worst
When I’m missing people I love
It’s the worst
Feeling alone in a crowd
It’s the worst
Being unwanted
It’s the worst

Discovering a new world
It’s the best
Learning something new
It’s the best

Napping with my dog
Laughing with my friends
It’s the best

Listening to music
Being in silence
It’s the best

Being among friends
Being all by my self
It’s the best

Being happy, being unhappy
Being angry, being glad
Simply just being alive
This is the best for me

5 kommentarer:

  1. good poem but we are missing some imagery.

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  2. David og Camilla:
    Flow/Rhythm: Got a good flow. First there comes a line and then a sentence with "That's the ..."
    Looks a lot like Charles Bukowski's.
    Rhyme: No rhyme.
    Remember:

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  3. good progress in the poem.
    we think it is a good poem.
    jonas lasse

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  4. 2x kristoffer
    there is a good message and flow in the poem. Good poem!

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  5. God poem, and it is possible to relate to your own life.

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