mandag den 24. januar 2011

Poem # 2

The best is when you are defeating any unwilling
To be victorious1 is a vacant seat
Strongness2 is safety like survival is living
And these values is the best

The worst is when I’m not able to look at myself into the mirror
Rather be sitting in loneliness and still have my honor in good condition
Taken is just a consequent of injustice
And these remarkable things is the worst

The worst is when you have met one’s superior 3
Bad sex, worse grades, and worst father
Imitation of individuals
And these symbols of bad living is the worst

The best is when finishing examination
Father and mother have safety-box in my
Feeling like a match-winner-creation
That is the best for me

Glossary:
1.      Victorious = sejrende
2.      Strongness = at være stærk
3.      To meet one’s superior = møde ens overmand

4 kommentarer:

  1. good idea with the glossary!

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  2. strong and playful words. the message is extraordinary and nice metafors. lasse, jonas

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  3. David og Camilla:
    Flow/Rhythm: There is not rhythm in the poem, because it like you read it out loud like you read a short story.

    Rhyme: No Rhyme.

    Remember: We do not think we will remember the poem, because there is not any repeatings and relations.

    But it is a good short story.

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  4. 2 x Kristoffer.
    In general, there could be a clearer message and a better connection in the poem.
    But it's a fine!

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