mandag den 24. januar 2011

Poem # 10

The worst is when time is not there
When time slips away
Time is too fast
That’s the worst

Love and women
Feelings and love for another
Too much time
That’s the worst

Women and love
Their shapes, bodies and their smiles
Too little time
That’s the best

The music in my ears
The notes, voices and beats flowing all around
Perfect time
That’s the best

The television in my room
Politicians, stars and other unimportant stuff
Just too much time
That’s the worst




The green grass
Boys running with each other with the ball
Pure Friendship
Perfect time
That’s the best

The family that I love
Supporting and caring
Too little time to enjoy
That’s the worst

Being happy about myself
Not caring what people think
Self happiness
The perfect moments
That’s the best
For me

2 kommentarer:

  1. David og Camilla:
    Flow/Rhythm: The flow is good. Repeat "time".
    Rhyme: No rhyme.
    Remember: It is a neutral poem, which do not stand out.

    SvarSlet
  2. Dorte and Boel:
    - Good flow.
    - we can not really relate it because we think it is a boy.

    SvarSlet